
Pleasant was the evening
Mesmerised by the beauty of dusk
There i walk down the lane
With the cool breeze patting over me.
The enchanthing woods nearby
Engulfed me with the melodies of the brook
Thunderstorm with a loud roar
Woke me from my dreamworld
Transition of the sky
making the woods darker and
wet with the drizzles
The smell of land
Awoke past memories in me
the sweet memories of childhood
When i danced with these raindrops
The beauty of woods
Increased manifold
With the blessings of the nature
There i sat in the woods
Mesmerised by the beauty of transition.
3 comments:
Excellent work....
you just perfectly implemented the theme of this poem...just like yours-'weird thoughts'...
apt heading-that gave me a preview of the poetic theme before even i started reading the contents of the poem...
This is a beautiful imagination with heart touching smilies...nice to knw that u r interested in writing poems..keep going...
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"Awoke my past memories
those sweet memories of childhood
When i danced in these raindrops
The beauty of woods
Increasing manifold..."
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It seems to be u r using I and mentioning me/I in all lines..I feel it will be more beautiful if u reduce... Becoz its already understood...that the suject is urself..
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Just my thought...
.Keep writing....
thanks 4 the comment rohith..wl surely correct it in the next poems....
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